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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

#humans #environment #governments #address #people
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isgroup
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group
 of
people
 is harmful to the environment. In
this
 ,
essay
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 I will discuss how the
goverment
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government
 identify these problems and what can general
people
 do.
Firstly
i
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 will give some real-life examples of environmental problem solutions and
secondly
 the prime role of
people
. Humans are extremely harmful to
nature
. A big number of
people
involved
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 with
this
. They cut down trees in a large number
as a result
 wild animals are no longer live in the
forest
. Even
people
 catch dangerous and friendly animals for food. At
this
 moment, everywhere in the world focus on the economy rather than
nature
. They make industry in reserve
forest
area
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 and farmland. So we can say, most of the time businessman or big company holders are a key factor for destroying the environment.
Although
 some wood furniture company
also
 cut down a tree from the
forest
.Another reason for damaging the environment is to kill
wild
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a wild
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animal
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animals
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. So that climate change rapidly. In terms of these problem solutions
firstly
, the government can give advertisements on television or newspaper,
also
 they can add some topic about
nature
 at primary school level. it will be beneficial for the
next
 generation.
Moreover
, they should give punishment for build industry or big housing
building
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on
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 the
forest
 area.
On the other hand
, general
people
 can be a great prospective for solve
this
 problem. like they can plant trees beside their home or make rooftop gardens in
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urban areas. ,
Also
 they can discourage other
people
 to buy plastic because it's extremely harmful to
nature
 especially for the soil.
similarly
, common
people
 can start
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a campaign
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campaign
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campaigns
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 on social media to save forset, animals and
sea
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the sea
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. By ,
this
 a lot of
people
 could be motivated for doing something In conclusion. there are lots of ways to dismiss
nature
 through
people
. So government should take steps for
this
 and common
people
also
 self do something for
nature
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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