In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

In
this
ambitious world,
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immigration
emigration
for education is becoming
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amoung
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among
younglings. Many nations government inspires youngsters to do job or tour
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annually
after completion of schooling and before admitting in an academy. In the forthcoming paragraph,
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pros and cons and exemplify with lucid examples.
To begin
with, if
student
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a student
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does
internship
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in foreign countries,
then
he would gain communication skills. Due to which he acquires the ability to give seminars in university.
For example
, while working in an organisation he faces customers which reduces hesitation.
Moreover
, he would be familiar with the culture of the country.
This
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one can learn moral values.
consequently
, in the recent
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the persons who had participated in
such
duties are more punctual than others.
However
, candidates who had taken a gap in studies are more
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conscious
to make money rather than academics. Due to
this
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they are not concentrating upon their subjects.
For instance
, in order to become economically
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they are
failling
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failing
in their
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careers
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.
Furthermore
, many students are not bothering about their
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and enjoying their lives independently.
in other words
, it creates
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in their relationship with their parents. Exemplar, they are breaking the hopes and expectations of their parents. To conclude, not only students should focus
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financial growth but
also
it is essential for them to be responsive towards their relationship with their parents. I believe that it has both pros and cons.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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