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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

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Many Countries health care managers required the government to raise the tax on junk
foods
 in order to control the public’s unhealthy eating habits.
This
 essay illustrates that
this
 method would not be affordable due to some problems.
Firstly
, homeless people would starve more than
past
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 and
secondly
,
this
 would not affect one who daily consumes
outsid
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outside
. growing the tariff up of fast prepared
foods
 have side effects on
homeless
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 and persons who have lower income. In most
of
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the
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countries, raw materials are highly valued which poor people prefers to consume junk and pre-cooked
foods
 rather than buy
the
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organic ones and cook them at home since that will cost
higher
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 price.
Therefore
, health issues would be purposeless toward their habitat of eating. Based on a survey in 2020 in Italy’s
Mc Donald
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McDonald
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 stores, 40% of the
costumers
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customers
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 were homeless ones
whom
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 eat at least a meal per
a
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day. As can be imagined, many will stay hungry and that may
causes
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 social disorders and indigestion. In crowded and big cities everyone has
busy
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 schedule
also
 they stay outside of their home for more than eight hours a day
thus
, they do not have enough time to cook
cuisun
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Suisun
cuisine
 at home and stay in
kitchen
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the kitchen
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 for a long time. Increasing taxes would not have any
impacts
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 on employees since they will pay for their feeding consumption no matter how expensive it could be. In Tokyo, 90% of people eat in restaurants since time is priceless for them and it is highly
essentially
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 to spend it wisely. To sum it up, levy
tariff
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a tariff
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of
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on
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 junk food and set
duty
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 for them won't be positively effective. In conclusion,
consuming
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 system of a society is really important to feed each person of it equally without sharply
increse
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increase
 the fee. It is mandatory, Both groups of
less
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 incomers and workers feed themselves by pre-cooked meals anytime they want. I strongly disagree to pay higher taxes for fast
foods
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food
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.
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