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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages late in life. To what extend do you agree?

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It is often said that sending
children
 to single-sex
schools
 is the best
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 for
children
.
However
, some convincing arguments
also
 are made against
this
 idea. I deeply believe that the benefits of co-educational
schools
 outweigh
its
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 drawbacks. Those who support the selection of co-educational
schools
 cite the various benefits which
such
schools
 bring for their
children
. One strong argument is that pupils have the chance to be
classmate
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classmates
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 with other pupils of the opposite sex and they can have some valuable experience from
this
 type of friendship. They firmly believe that
the
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school
 is a place where students have to educate and learn all general knowledge and necessary skills which are required for living in
society
. They really think that
schools
 are a sort of
society
, and
such
 a
society
 does not include individuals
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the
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single sex
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.
In contrast
, opponents who claim single-sex
schools
 provide better conditions for student education point out some weak reasons rooted in culture and religion. They are terribly worried about moving
away
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 their
children
 from their culture and religion, and they absolutely insist that
children
 may face some moral and emotional problems in co-educational
schools
 which may affect their lives. They seriously believe that
the
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school
 is a place where
children
 learn all knowledge and skills required for getting a suitable job in the future and activities which may endanger their culture and religion must be avoided in the
school
. Overall, I am quite certain that
the
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restricting students
is
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 not a good solution to increase the quality of their education. Parents should know that the
school
 is a small
society
 where pupils can learn how to behave in
real
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 world, especially when they visit an individual
with
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 the opposite sex.
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