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Human kind have varied opinion as to whether use of bicycles as the main form of transport has more pros than cons.

One of the
health
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 benefits of bike
use
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 is keeping physically active and fit.As a matter of fact,regular physical activity
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can help
protecr
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protect
 one from serious diseases
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 as obesity,arthritis,and heart diseases.
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 the
end
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 an individual indulging in regular cycle rides will have
reduced
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a reduced
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 risk of acquiring
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 problems,associated with
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle.
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,a study carried out in the year 2019
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 manchester university revealed that 70
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 of persons who cycled regularly were physically active and fit.
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,
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use
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the use
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 of bicycles helps one to feel fit and physically active.
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,
i
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 think
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use
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the use
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 of two wheels can contribute to
health
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 hazards in unlikely weather conditions.Riding bike during
rainy
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the rainy
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 and cold season cannot only be cumbersome
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but
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 cause
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 issues affecting the chest leading to diseases
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 as pneumonia and flu.
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a
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research conducted
in
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university
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the university
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 of Nairobi in 2019,revealed that 80
percent
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 of bike riders contracted chest complications during
cold
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the cold
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 and rainy season.
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 ,
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use
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the use
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 of bicycles during unfavourable
climate
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 is a
health
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 risk in conclusion,while
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use
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 of
cycle
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a cycle
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 helps in physical activity and keeping in shape,it is dangerous riding during rainy and cold seasons,due to contracting chest problems.
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 in my opinion the pros
outweighs
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 the cons.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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