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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
As
the
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industrialization
development
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, it looks like
people
 can make different decisions on their career,
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lifestyles
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life styles
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lifestyles
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 or nutrition products. While there are
variety
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 of
choices
 for
people
 to choose
, I
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 believe it only suits
for
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a small
amount
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 of
people
 and we need to make
choices
 more sensible based on
individual
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the individual
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situation
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. There will be a narrow
of
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selections
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selection
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 when
people
 make up their minds depends on their own situation
such
 as
,
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 financial level, personal skills, and abilities.
Although
 there are plenty of job vacancies, many
people
 still find
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it hard
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 to look for a job.
For example
, after I considered the working experiences and strengths I have got, there
is
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 not
much
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choices
 for me
at
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 the job market.
Furthermore
, we need to have a clear mind when we purchase the
stuffs
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 to avoid unnecessary cost.
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, when I decided to buy a car, I will make up my mind to focus on its make and mileage
in
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 a reasonable price before I go to the markets.
Otherwise
, you will get lost by large amounts of manufactures and make a regret decision. In conclusion, it is good to have different
choices
 for
people
 nowadays. While I believe it is important to make a clever decision regards to our own situation.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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