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Write a description of a person you admire from history in 150-180 words

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Nguyen Sinh Cung, known as Ho Chi Minh or Bac Ho was a great revolutionist and the
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 Republic of Vietnam from 1945 to 1969. He must be the most famous person in Vietnam, he was known through stories and songs, people respect and admire him for what he did in the past. His pictures show that he always wear normal or “cheap” clothes which everyone wears and sandals, make us think that he lives very simple and familiar to the poor citizens throughout the war. He is skinny and short but he
train
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 himself
everyday
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 for a healthy and strong body as well as learning a lot for a smarter mind. He is known to have mastered 20 languages, especially French when he doesn’t need an interpreter for negotiations with the French. He was one of the greatest
revolutionist
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 and
priminister
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PriceMinister
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 of ours who lead our country out of
darkness
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 of the wars have been going on for years. He is adored and respected by people around the world, mostly Vietnam and
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 by UNESCO in 1987
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