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Band 7

Smoking should be banned in public places because it not only harms the smokers, but also those who are nearby. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today smoking activities are prohibited in public areas in order to prevent non-
smokers
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 from
smoke
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 exposure. I definitely agree with
this
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 statement because it will lead to a number of
health
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 issues for both
smokers
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 and
second
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-hand
smokers
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. The
first
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 reason why I agree with the prohibition of smoking in public places is that smoking is not good for
smokers
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’ well-being. they might get unhealthy on their body cavity,
such
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 as liver,
heart
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, lungs, etc. Your body will be broken and diseases will come up and harm you;
for example
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, my father is a
smoker
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 and after smoking for 20 years he got sick on his lungs and he often could not breathe normally today, after he checked
to
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with
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 a doctor, a doctor said that there is some bad effect of his smoking habit. and if he wants to get healthier, he must get
heart
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 surgery to put three rings on his
heart
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 vessels. Aside from leading to
health
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 issues for
smokers
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,
smoke
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 exposure will trigger a number of
health
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 problems for passive
smokers
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. Passive
smokers
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 always breathe
smoke
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 without smoking, some research said that passive
smokers
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 could get bigger damage than
smokers
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 that happened because
smoke
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 is a trigger for passive
smokers
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 to get bad risks,
such
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 as lungs cancer,
heart
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 coroner,
heart
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 disease, stroke, and others;
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, my friend on a college is a passive
smoker
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 who often hangs out with his
smoker
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 friends. After 3 years always becomes a passive
smoker
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 for a period and often, he can’t breathe normally like before. According to that issue, he had a verdict to has lung cancer and must get surgery immediately. To conclude, I personally agree with the statement saying that
smokers
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 should be prohibited in public areas because it will trigger some
health
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 problems for the
smokers
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 themselves and the passive
smokers
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,
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, lung cancer,
heart
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 coroner,
heart
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 disease, stroke, and others because of the bad impact from smokes.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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