In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those crimes?

Many countries in
this
world have crimes every single
day
, and mostly the number of the
crime
rate increases
day
by
day
. There are several reasons why the
crime
rate increases and there are
also
solutions that
people
can take to tackle the problems.
Firstly
, it is about public facility conditions
which
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are not good enough for citizens to feel safe.
For example
, bus terminals
which
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do not have a
good
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well
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integrated security system and bad
condition
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conditions
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would be a dangerous place with many pickpockets, and bad hypnotizers who can take our wallets or our precious items whenever they have any opportunities to commit the
crime
.
Secondly
, it is about
lifestyle
conditions which drive
people
to own much
money
to support
their
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lifestyle
that they want every
day
. To have a fancy
lifestyle
,
people
must have a lot of
money
, and for some unfortunate
people
, it is likely that one of the methods to get the
money
fast is becoming a thief or a robber or the other criminals so that they can spend the
money
for their luxurious
lifestyle
. And
Lastly
, it might be that the
people
are greedy so they want
money
more illegally by committing a white-collar
crime
such
as corruption. Due to the fact that
crime
rates increase,
people
have to fight and search for the best solutions to decrease the problems. One of the solutions is having a character-building education since the baby and makes it the main subject at school. The children are taught about positive characters
such
as respecting other
people
’s rights and doing charity so that they would have a good character when they grow up to be adults.
Besides
, the parents have to teach good vibes so their children become good boys or girls in every single moment. Another solution regarding the
crime
owing to poor public facilities is to improve the security systems by installing CCTV cameras where the highest potential
crime
might take place. All public facilities must provide a cashless payment system so
people
do not need to bring their cash to minimize
the
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crime
. To sum up,
although
there are some
crime
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cases which happen in society and the number of cases goes up year by year, there are some ways
people
can take to prevent the problem from happening.
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