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News plays an important part of most people’s lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead?

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In recent times, details of the updates and changes across the globe are being delivered through various sources. In fact, there is a good reason why having access to
such
 information is essential for
people
’s daily lives. The
media
,
however
, covers negative occurrences rather than the positive for various reasons which will be outlined in
this
 essay.
Furthermore
, whether
people
 should be informed of more pleasant
news
 or the opposite will be elucidated.
To begin
 with,
news
are
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 integral sources that
connects
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connect
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people
 to the world.
For example
, a viewer from England can learn about the political situation in Afghanistan or a storm in the Philippines through
media
 in
real time
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. Not only situations from continents away but
also
 cases from
neighbourhood
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 can be reached through
news
 which is why it is vital that
people
 have access to them. But why does it seem like the world is always full of doom on television and social
media
? There are reasonable explanations
to
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 why audiences receive more unpleasant
news
 rather than good. It is primarily because compared to ancient times, there are more crimes, political conflicts, and extreme weather conditions. These overwhelmed the celebratory occasions, so it is perceived that
media
 is sharing only the unlikable. The truth is
people
 need to be aware of both terrific
news
 and destructions. When we hear about uplifting circumstances, we feel enjoyment and relaxed. But when
people
 are informed of destructive events, they can take precautions in advance. To illustrate, if notified in advance of the upcoming hurricane, one can make necessary preparations for survival.
Thus
, newspapers and TV programs should include both positive and negative equally. To conclude, despite the fact that there are more unfavourable events nowadays,
information
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 conveyed shouldn’t be filtered. Every nationality requires truthful updates from across town or half the world away so that they can be on the same page.
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