Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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is a base of all improvements in technology during all the times in history and It always gets better by studying old sciences and improving them. Some insist that all the generated results of experiments should be shared with
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say that there are some levels of privacy and
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crowd should be informed
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all private
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in different fields, because of security and
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reasons. I will provide more
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of
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both sides of thinking and give my honest opinion at the end. Regarding
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first
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field of
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(sharing
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with
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), we can say that It will bring several benefits that two of the most considerable ones are provided
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and fast progress. With publishing the full
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of experiments there all always some
comunity
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being produced due to the interests of students
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these areas of generated results.
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, there are some free open source projects that are available
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specific websites, like Github, where
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can say their opinion and discuss
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their views of that product.
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interesting fact, fast improvements in the given experiment can be provided, because every person who has interest can contribute to that project and help the progress of that to be in
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rapid way, and
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how open source publications will be improved fast. Moving on to the
next
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popular
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(providing privacy in generated results by not sharing all
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with
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), we can think about two main reasons
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why we need to respect
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field of
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.
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, for
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security reasons
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it scientists have to just share the generic parts of their
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so that
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can not harm their application.
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, all of us are aware of
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disasterous
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effects of hackers attacks
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famouse
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websites(
for example
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, Twitter and etc.), and It is obvious that, the more
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about
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they have, the more offensive they can appear, so we need not
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share all
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with
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, we can discuss
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knowledge
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independence;one of the most important factors for not spreading detailed
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with people. Any company for obtaining its placement between
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into account. Consider NVIDIA company as an example; It barely shares its full products
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its published documents, and
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why It is an independent company among its all other
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. Overall, as discussed in advance, there are two sides of
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topic, where some suggest that public has the right to know
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of experiments,
on the other
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disagree for security and independence factors. I believe that the
second
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is more realistic and scientists should only publish a general description of their applications and hide detailed ones from citizens.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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