Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Knowledge
is a base of all improvements in technology during all the times in history and It always gets better by studying old sciences and improving them. Some insist that all the generated results of experiments should be shared with
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all private
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reasons. I will provide more
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both sides of thinking and give my honest opinion at the end. Regarding
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field of
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), we can say that It will bring several benefits that two of the most considerable ones are provided
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and fast progress. With publishing the full
details
of experiments there all always some
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these areas of generated results.
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specific websites, like Github, where
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their views of that product.
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interesting fact, fast improvements in the given experiment can be provided, because every person who has interest can contribute to that project and help the progress of that to be in
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rapid way, and
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(providing privacy in generated results by not sharing all
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), we can think about two main reasons
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why we need to respect
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security reasons
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it scientists have to just share the generic parts of their
knowledge
so that
others
can not harm their application.
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famous
websites(
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they have, the more offensive they can appear, so we need not
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share all
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.
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knowledge
independence;one of the most important factors for not spreading detailed
knowledge
with people. Any company for obtaining its placement between
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should take
this
view
into account. Consider NVIDIA company as an example; It barely shares its full products
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its published documents, and
that is
why It is an independent company among its all other
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competitive
competitions
. Overall, as discussed in advance, there are two sides of
view
in
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topic, where some suggest that public has the right to know
details
of experiments,
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others
disagree for security and independence factors. I believe that the
second
view
is more realistic and scientists should only publish a general description of their applications and hide detailed ones from citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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