Some people think the government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve environmental problems. To what extent do you agree?

These days, the environmental crisis has
been become
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more and more concerned as the evidence of climate change attributed to a drastic rise in greenhouse gases emission, which one of the main causes is burning fossil
fuel
to serve the need of
plethora
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a plethora
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of
cars
. As the effort to reduce the anthropogenic, it may be a promising strategy to increase the
cost
of
fuel
. As being a car user, I absolutely dismiss
with
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this
plan according to the following reasons, and
this
essay will purpose
the
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better alternative solutions for amelioration.
First
of all, the drawbacks of augmentation in
cost
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the cost
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of
fuel
is escalating the
economic
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economy
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. Due to increased daily payment,
people
try to save their money,
instead
of spending it
with
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accessories,
dilicious
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delicious
foods, or new clothes. As the result, the
restarants
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restaurants
, stores, and niches markets face
the
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difficulty to make an income.
Secondly
, depression can be an impact of the high
fuel
cost
. When citizens can not afford
for
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the expensive
fuel
price, they need to sell their
cars
because they do not have enough money for paying.
Therefore
, a surge in
fuel
cost
can bring about
the
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adversity. There are solutions, which are more effective than increased
fuel
's
cost
in
term
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of
environmental
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environmentally
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friendly, and can improve the well-being too.
Firstly
, in order to reduce
enormous
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the enormous
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amount of harmful gases released from tremendous
cars
,
government
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the government
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should give priority to improving the
compentency
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competency
competence
of
cars
, which should be eco friendly.
For example
, the electricity
comsuming
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consuming
cars
, without releasing Carbon dioxide should be promoted and sold
in
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the
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cheaper price than
fuel
consuming
cars
to lure
people
turn to
use
it
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them
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.
Secondly
, public transport should be developed to be more convenient and more comfortable.
Consequently
,
people
turn to
use
it
,
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and reduce to
use
the private
cars
,
eventually
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the disastrous gases will be definitely decreased. In summary,
although
imposing
higher
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a higher
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cost
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costs
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of
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gasoline can reduce the
use
of
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a car
the car
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car
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cars
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, it is not the best method because it contributes to the economic
collaspe
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collapse
, and being stressed among
people
.
Moreover
, there are more promising strategies compared to increasing gasoline prices
such
as
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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cars
, and developing public transport.
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