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Write an essay to describe Hanoi city in 250 words

#hanoi #city
Hanoi
, which is the capital
city
 of Vietnam, is fascinating
by
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 millions of visitors because of its popularity and friendliness. Located in the north part of the country,
Hanoi
 is
one
 of the most ancient cities in the world due to its age, which is greater than
one
 thousand years old.
This
 place can offer both comfortable temperature and classic design, as
Hanoi
 has
the
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 tropical climate and talented architects. Mentioned to
Hanoi
,
people
 definitely think about Hoan Kiem Lake, which is known as the "green lungs" of the capital
city
. As its name, the lake
give
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the
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unexplainably fresh air
that is
 really comfortable for the pedestrian.
Next
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 sight that cannot be missed is
Hanoi
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the Hanoi
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 art gallery, with approximately 700 artworks display carefully. Unfortunately, it is prohibited to take photographs of
these masterpiece
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this masterpiece
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. A long time ago, the capital of Vietnam used to be a really poor
city
, but now it has changed to
one
 that
full
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 of
skycrappers
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skyscrapers
, huge schools and hospitals.
Food
 in
Hanoi
 is
extremly
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extremely
 great, from traditional
food
 to modern
one
, because of the
skillful
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 experienced cooks. Tourists can try
diversity
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a diversity
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 of
food
,
such
 as bread, beef noodle. The highlight of
this
city
 is the
leasure
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leisure
-time activities
that
is
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 completely exciting and energetic. Taking a short trip to Hoan Kiem lake, tourists can take part in some noisy musical shows or singing favourite songs on the pavement.
People
 here are really friendly and welcoming. They are always ready to help you anytime. In conclusion,
people
 and tourists here are satisfied with
Hanoi
 very much. The
city
 has many stunning views , mouth-watering good-looking
food
, and
furthermore
, friendly
people
 with gorgeous sightseeing. Indeed, it is an incredible place for
people
 who are desperate to have a wonderful time and
remarkably
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 memorable feeling.
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