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Write an essay to describe Hanoi city in 250 words

#hanoi #city
Vietnam is a country with many stunning sceneries, and
also
 busy roads and streets. As many people could probably guess, I come from
Hanoi
, a busy city with old scenic beauty, and have been raised here ever since I was born. And today I am gonna talk about
Hanoi
, the capital of Vietnam. Romantic, breathtaking, beautiful and crowding are the words easily used to describe
Hanoi
’s sceneries and streets. Being the biggest city, noisy and packed streets are normal things to see here.
However
,
Hanoi
 has a distinct charisma that makes visitors tend to fall in love with the city despite its faults. From Long Bien bridge, Hoan Kiem lake to Tran Vu temple, all of them has the unique beauty of
the
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ancient architecture.
Hanoi
’s culture is very complicated, but
also
 extremely astounding. Basically, when you walk along Hoan Kiem’s lake, you will definitely be able to find lots of small restaurants selling bun dau, beef noodles and spring rolls. The food is very scrumptious, and the
the
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look is very mouth-watering. Going around the “walking streets”, you may even easily find tons of activities,
such
 as dancing, singing or even some art displays. Talking about
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, in every summer, the weather considerably changes, it might be hot on sunny days, the temperature could be up to 40oC. Yet, on winter days, its temperature might even go below 10oC.
Although
 the climate is sometimes unstable, people here are very friendly and in whatever situation, they will still
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 other people, no matter what. They are
also
 welcoming and kind. Above all,
Hanoi
 is a great place to visit, and the more you explore, the more exciting it gets. If you have time, it is a pretty good choice to come and take a look at beautiful views and sites.
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