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Write an essay to describe Hanoi city in 250 words

#hanoi #city
When visiting a hustle and bustle
city
 like
Hanoi
, many tourists are captivated by the distinctive cuisine and the deep historical architecture.
However
, it is the liveliness of the residents across
Hanoi
 that make tourists feel welcomed and nostalgic. In the morning,
tourist
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 are greeted with the sounds of hurrying passersby on the street and vehicles passing by. Children along with their parents hurry on in order not to be late for work and school. Old retired folks spend their morning happily chatting
with
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while exercising and jogging around the
city
. During the bright sunny day, everyone
become
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 more apparent. Tall oak trees occasionally move along with the breezing wind others and gorgeous flowers planted around the
city
 beam brightly under the sunlight.
However
, the nightlife in
Hanoi
 is when the young hustle-bustle side of the
city
 comes out. The
city
 in the evening
is brighten
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 up by the light from tiny houses,
colorful
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 neon store signs and tall modern buildings. All of
this
 light making the streets aesthetically appealing and comforting, yet the streets are so lonely with the occasional tourist walking by.
Although
 the streets seem so isolated, the sounds of excited voices and swift but energetic footstep of tourists
makes
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 it a bit more welcoming. In conclusion,
Hanoi
 is very much a busy and crowded
city
.
However
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 the friendly people, the energetic
day time
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 and the captivating nightlife is what makes the
city
 become more colourful and more lively
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