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As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people traveling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problem?

#tourism #people #demand #flights #environment #measures
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Due to the high population of
people
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traveling
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, there is a
dramatical
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 rise in the requirement
of
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 more
airplane
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airplanes
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.
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problems
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 and suggest some possible solutions to deal with
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 issue. One of the most significant
problems
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 is that the growing demand for more flights can lead to air
pollution
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.
Aero planes
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Aeroplanes
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 release toxic fumes into the atmosphere, which leads to the depletion of the ozone layer.
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, global warming which enhances the temperature of the Earth can be caused.
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, many studies prove that the earth is getting hotter and hotter per year.
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, another issue
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cause
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caused
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 by
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 trend is sound
pollution
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, which affects the life of
people
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 who live in the areas near airports.
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 is because planes have powerful engines which make a lot of
noise
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,
people
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 living near airports have to hear the
noise
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 of the
airplane
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 all day so that they can feel very tired and can not pay attention to anything. There are some solutions which can reduce the consequence of
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 problem.
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, trees should be planted more all over the world. It is the easiest activity and everyone is able to do it.
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,
this
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 problem can be tackled if the government encourages their residents to use public transport
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 as buses for short distance
travels
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travel
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, to address
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noise
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the noise
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pollution
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 of
the
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airplanes
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aeroplanes
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, companies should be encouraged to invest more to create low
noise
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 engines to reduce sound levels.
People
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 living near the airports
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 should use headphones to protect their ears from
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of
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 the
noise
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. In conclusion, the
problems
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 of the growing demand for flights are air
pollution
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 and sound
pollution
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. These
problems
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 can be solved by encouraging
people
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 to use other means of transport and investing more to develop low
noise
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 engines.
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