Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

As a matter of fact that
children
play a crucial role in the prosperity of a country.
Hence
, how to educate them to become useful staff is not only really a great mission of teachers but
also
parents
. From my perspective, I am completely convinced by
this
idea for some reasons mentioned in
this
essay. On the one hand, it is obvious that
parents
keep a
principle
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responsibility to guide their
children
all
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things from gaining
knowledge
and social skills to treat generously with others.
Furthermore
,
children
are certainly and mostly affected by their
parents
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environment
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environments

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such
as
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lifestyles

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life styles
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lifestyles

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and their
knowledge
.
Hence
, it is
undeneable
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undeniable

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that the child achievements always have the
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biggest

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bigest
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contributions of their family.
In addition
, no matter how it happens all
parents
really want to do
best
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the best

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things for their boys and girls. Because of that reasons we always believe that
children
surely receive the best education from their family to become helpful persons for our society.
On the other hand
,
although
we know clearly about the importance of family with our
children
but
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we can not assume all teaching for them due to there
are
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a lot of
knowledge
and social skills they have to learn from the teachers.
Such
as our generation said: without
school
or without
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teacher
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teachers

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, no one can be successful.
Thus
,
school
is really
a
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actractive
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spot where is not only for
children
expanding their
knowledge
but
also
for them interacting with their friends and saving wonderful students memories. Through community
activities
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children
in
school
can help them have more experiences which competently communicate with people and become more confident after graduating. In conclusion,
children
are totally like rising generations for our national development become strong and consistent
compare
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with other countries. For that
reasons
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, having appropriate schedules to educate them
more
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and more beneficial for our community that
were
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completely responsible for both family and
school
to evolve
this
operation.
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