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some people say the main environmental problem of our time is loss of particular species of plants and animals. others say there are more important environmental problems . Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that the biggest
enviromnemnt
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environment
 issue
nowdays
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 is the extinction of different animal species and the loss of particular plants in
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nature. Others argue, that there are more serious issues we should be afraid of. In
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 I would like to evaluate both
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 of
views
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 and share my own opinion. At the
first
 sight, it might look like that global warming is the biggest issue mankind
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if
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 facing these days. While experts from all over the globe are making
predcitcions
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 about our future on the Earth which is getting warmer and warmer every year, another serious problem is arising. According to
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recent research in the United States, the extinction of particular animal species would lead to the starvation of all living creatures in less than five years. Without bees
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 example, all the plants would just rot in the fields. I believe, that many things were done to share the problem of global warming
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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