People are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks. Why? What can be done to reduce sugary drink consumption?

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It is true that the consumption of sweetened

drinks

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has been increasing significantly.

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esay

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essay

will discuss some main reasons why

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tendency is formed and suggest some

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viable

solutions before coming to a reasonable conclusion.

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with, sugary

drinks

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are widely consumed by people in modern life due to

a massive marketing campaigns

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massive marketing campaigns

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. The manufacturers throw their many around by advertising their soft

drinks

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on television, social

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media

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medias

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media

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celeberites

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celebrities

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, sweetened drink companies step by step

are

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successed

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succeed

succeeded

in forming

daily

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the daily

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habit

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habits

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of consuming their productions for customers.

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, the affordable price of high sugar beverages is another reason to make their sales significantly grow all over the world.

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on low money customers, soft

drinks

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cost just a penny and are sold everywhere.

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, soft

drinks

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are usually add-on items in

fast-food

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the fast-food

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menu to interest

customer

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customers

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spending money for buying combo or package meals. One of

solutions

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the solutions

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this

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these

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worrying

concerns

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concern

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is the Government could try to imply

heavier

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a heavier

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tax on

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fizzy

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drink companies.

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measure will affect directly

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apply

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manufacturers’

bussiness

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business

and low down the number of their productions to soft drink markets.

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solution has been done

susscessfully

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successfully

in some countries like France or Singapore

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the number of

consumming

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consuming

sugary beverages have reduced 30% in 2020 compared to 2010.

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, the promotion of soft

drinks

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to the public should be restricted especially to young individuals or children.

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Coca cola

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Coca-cola

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, Sprite or other frizzy beverages’ advertisements on cartoon

network

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networks

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or educational channels in Vietnam have been prohibited since 2019. In conclusion, despite the strong development of high sugar beverages manufacturers in

morden

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modern

life, effective solutions can be considered to reverse

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trend. It is predicted that more and more people will realize

negative

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the negative

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effects of sugary

drinks

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and consume

carefully

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them carefully

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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