Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people think that it is important for the children to get extra
work
for the home it will help to revise the concept what they study in the school.
Although
, others believe it is
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unnecessary burden for children. In
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we discuss both views and in the
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I give my opinion.
Firstly
,
teachers
give
homework
to the
students
because it is important to stay connected with the studies and it will helpful for the
teachers
to analyze how much pupils understand the topic as well as which topic
need
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more practice and revision.
For instance
, so many
students
have hesitation
problem
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. if they don't understand
question
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they do not ask about again owing to shyness or hesitation in
this
scenario
homework
helps the
teachers
for evaluation so they will teach that topic again.
Secondly
, it is
aid
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for make children busy in a home and
also
do
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some productive
work
.
On the other hand
,
students
have lots of burdens compared to the past . Now they have more subjects as well as they have to do extra-curriculum activities which
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exhausting for them.
For example
, schools try to make every student participates in extra- curriculum activities because they are important for the overall development.
Moreover
,
students
also
do extra study for their weekly tests and
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monthly tests. It
become
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overburden
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for them to do daily
homework
also
. In my
opinion
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teacher should give them limited
homework
and try to give them alternative days
work
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, so that way they are connected to
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studies and
also
not exhausted
with
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the
work
. In conclusion, some amount of
homework
is definitely beneficial for the academic success of
students
.
However
,
teachers
need to ensure that they are not burdening
students
with excessive
work
.
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