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A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waiterers in your local newspaper. write a letter to the applying for the job . explain what you are currently doing . describe your suitability for this area of work . say when you can attend on interview.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to apply for the job. Yesterday, I saw an advertisement in the English local newspaper your restaurant
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is
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hiring waiters. My name is Manpreet Kaur. My third semester was done
of
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in
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the
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apply
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Hotel management in the
last
 week. Nowadays, I am free to do something good. I am planning to attain some extra experience. When I was in my country I
did work
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 in
the
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a
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 restaurant as the position of waiter. I have two years
experience
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of experience
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 in
this
 field. So, I think my experience will be
coutable
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countable
accountable
 here.
In addition
, I know how to serve food to the customer
as well as
 I really know about cleaning.
This
 thing is very valuable in the
reastaurant
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restaurant
.
In addition
, I can come
Monday
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on Monday
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 at 10 am for the interview. I already forward my resume
in
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to
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 your email. I will
be wait
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 for your response. I hope you will take
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a decisoin
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decisoin
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decision
decisions
 very soon.
Your
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 sincerely, Manpreet Kaur.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea related to the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Use a clear and logical structure throughout the letter to improve readability and flow.
coherence cohesion
Include a suitable greeting and sign-off to maintain the formality expected in a job application letter.
task achievement
Cover all aspects requested in the task prompt thoroughly to ensure a full response.
task achievement
Use an appropriate and consistent tone that is polite and professional for this type of correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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