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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

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Now a day, immigration from the motherland, to
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more developed countries, has been trendier and more popular than before. Leaving your motherland and living in a foreign
country
, either for living or for studying, undoubtedly, has some advantages and some disadvantages. In
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, I review some bright sides and dark sides of immigration. I believe, one of the most admirable advantages of living in a foreign
country
 is that it gives you a bunch of precious experiences,
such
 as a new lifestyle,
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different eating habits, a wider circle of friends, and an open-minded thinking style.
For example
, after living in a strange
country
 for a while, your mind will be released from biases and prejudgments ideas about religion.
Moreover
, living abroad
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 gives you more job opportunities in comparison with your home
country
. For a migrant individual, there are
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vast
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 of job platforms, in different industries. In fact, in many developed countries,
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bilingual high-educated employees, are more welcome than
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native job seekers.
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, there are some disadvantages
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 leaving your sweet home and living in a perfect but strange
country
. Homesickness is a serious problem for most
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immigrants
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, especially the young ones. In fact, these psychological disorders that
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 due to separation from all of your familiar
life
 experience
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 can have strong and negative effects on your success and happiness in your new
life
. Isolation and lack of confidence are only some of
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 effects of homesickness. Another notable problem of living abroad
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 is the language barrier. No matter how high-educated and professional you are. When you are living or working in a
country
 as a
second
 language citizen, you have to pass many barriers over and over for reaching the least level of your abilities. In conclusion, Immigration is a coin with two sides. One side is a higher level of living essentials, and another side is a marathon of passing barriers and solving problems, in
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 of your
life
.
However
, it is essential for humankind, to experience a versatile
life
, to achieve a deeper vision through the universe. It is the main purpose of our existence in the universe.
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