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Nowadays many people prefer to study or live in foreign countries. While studying and living abroad brings many benefits to individuals, it also has a number of disadvantages. What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

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Many people emigrate from their native countries nowadays. It has been a gradually increasing trend, as plenty of
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 students
as well as ordinary workers
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 leave their homelands hoping to become more successful.
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, they usually have to separate from
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 and leave their places of residence.
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To begin
 with, there are some considerable pros.
Firstly
, the youth can study in foreign universities in order to become prosperous specialists, which is not a trivial goal to achieve in the native country.
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, some of the best Lithuanian pupils choose to study at
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 of Cambridge because it is considered to be one of the top universities in the world in terms of the quality of education.
Secondly
, adults
also
 migrate abroad if they want to earn more money and to have better career opportunities.
For example
, the minimum salary in the UK is around 1000 pounds, while in Lithuania it is 300 Euros.
Therefore
, people can afford to satisfy their needs better living in wealthy foreign countries.
By contrast
, there
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 cons too.
To begin
 with, leaving the homeland usually means damaging relationships with other people. In my personal experience, after my cousins left the country they have not been socialising so much with their parents,
although
 they have kept in touch with them.
Additionally
, when a person owns a flat or a house, he should continue to pay taxes even if he leaves the place of residence and lives abroad.
Thus
, noteworthy is the fact that one can miss relatives, and leaving home can be unpleasant sometimes. In conclusion, it can be seen that something should be sacrificed due to the seeking of a better life.
However
, it is generally advantageous to take the challenge of living in a foreign country to become a successful person, being it education or work. It is hoped that all countries in the future will be able to provide
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 citizens equal opportunities to achieve their life goals.
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