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people used different number of social websites in Canada.

#people #websites #canada
The provided line chart gives information about the percentage of people who have used the
internet
 in three nations
USA
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, Canada and Mexico
ovre
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over
 a
period
 of 10 years between 1999 and 2009. Overall, it can be clearly seen from the graph that
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the USA
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 had the highest percentage of
internet
 surfaces while
Mexican
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the Mexican
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 had the lowest by the end of the
period
.
To begin
 with
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the USA
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 that had the most majority of
internet
 users compromise with the two remaining countries. In 2003 experienced a democratic rise
of
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 the number of
internet
 users in Canada at….. And the percentage has continued to climb up to…. By 2009.
as
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for
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the number of
internet
 surfaces in Canada was increase gradually overall the
period
 until it peaked…. By the end of the
period
.
Although
 Mexico had a small ratio of
internet
 surfaces, it has seen a
stead
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 rise during a 10 years As
result
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 of
that
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 it has achieved over…. By 2009.
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