Give possible reasons and recommendations. It is generally acknowledged that families are now not as close as they used to be.

The bond between the
members
of a nuclear family in the previous
generation
was strong and they were close to each other.
However
, in comparison to the previous era, the
families
in today modern society do not have
such
close kinship. Below in the following paragraphs, I will enunciate in more detail the reasons for
this
issue
and the recommendation to address
such
issue
. The
first
reason is poor
communication
between each member of the nuclear family. Poor
communication
and lack of
communication
leads to misunderstanding and tear the
members
of the family apart.
For example
, during the family dinner
gathering
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the parents and children are busy with their mobile phones and do not speak to each other.
Consequently
, after a certain period, they become lost interest in
communication
with other
members
of the family.
Moreover
, unlike
families
in the previous
generation
that frequently spent
time
together, in
this
,era the
families
rarely spend
time
together. Each of them is busy dealing
their
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jobs, studies, communities and friends. The availability of modern technology
also
influences the family member to spend their leisure
time
alone rather than having chats with other family
members
.
For instance
, after
graduated
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from senior high school the child continues their study abroad. During the study
period
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the child rarely spends
time
with parents and siblings, as the result, they become emotionally estranged from parents and siblings. Considering
such
issue
is considered
as
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serious
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issue
in
family
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the family
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, it is important to
takes
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serious measures. According to my personal opinion, I believe
communication
plays
crucial
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role.
Thus
, the
members
of nuclear
families
have to spend more
time
together
such
as spend
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the holiday
a holiday
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holiday
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together and have family
dinner
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every
weeks
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. During
such
activities
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they could share jokes, problems and good news
to
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each other. Based on the foregoing, I personally believe that the
families
in
this
generation
are not as close as
previous
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generation
and cause by bad
communication
.
Therefore
, maintain the relationship between each member
in
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the family is important.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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