Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and see the world. The teaching of a foreign language should be compulsory at all primary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is undeniable that

language

explains the identity and character of a nation, including but not limited to their perspective in perceiving the world and how they think

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something. Based on

this

background, some people argued that

language

is crucial and it should be mandatory to be taught at all primary schools. In

this

regard, I am of the opinion to accord with

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statement,

however

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limited to the most useful

language

only,

such

as Mandarin and

English

. The

first

reason

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my opinion is that it would be really helpful if we are able to understand, speak, write and read

foreign

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language

. Nowadays, most of the

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research, journal and writing are made in

foreign

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language

, namely in

English

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language

. If we are able to use

English

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language

well, we can follow the most

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research and study which will improve our knowledge and career.

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, it will be an advantage for us to travel to

other area

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another area

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For instance

, when Indonesian people go to study and live in European countries would require us to fluently in applying at least

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language

Secondly

, communication is crucial in doing business and improving our

career

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. To communicate well, we are required to speak in

internationally

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accepted

language

, namely

English

or Mandarin

language

. Without

such

ability, we would be hindered to communicate and

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with them.

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, international lawyers are required to possess

foreign

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language

, at least

English

language

Otherwise

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will be unable to engage with

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client

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from overseas. Based on the foregoing, we can conclude that foreign

language

especially internationally accepted

language

is crucial nowadays. Learning

language

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cannot be done in

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period, it is a long term investment.

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, it should be taught from an early age.

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