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Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and see the world. The teaching of a foreign language should be compulsory at all primary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is undeniable that
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 explains the identity and character of a nation, including but not limited to their perspective in perceiving the world and how they think
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 something. Based on
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 background, some people argued that
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 is crucial and it should be mandatory to be taught at all primary schools. In
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 regard, I am of the opinion to accord with
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 limited to the most useful
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 only,
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 as Mandarin and
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. The
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 reason
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 my opinion is that it would be really helpful if we are able to understand, speak, write and read
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. Nowadays, most of the
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 research, journal and writing are made in
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. If we are able to use
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 well, we can follow the most
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 research and study which will improve our knowledge and career.
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, it will be an advantage for us to travel to
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, when Indonesian people go to study and live in European countries would require us to fluently in applying at least
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.
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, communication is crucial in doing business and improving our
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. To communicate well, we are required to speak in
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an internationally
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 accepted
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, namely
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 or Mandarin
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. Without
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 ability, we would be hindered to communicate and
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 with them.
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, international lawyers are required to possess
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, at least
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 will be unable to engage with
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the client
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 from overseas. Based on the foregoing, we can conclude that foreign
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 especially internationally accepted
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 is crucial nowadays. Learning
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 cannot be done in
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 period, it is a long term investment.
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, it should be taught from an early age.
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