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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Nowadays, following a single
career
 path is no longer suitable for the economic situations of an individual.
furthermore
, Adapting to various careers of earning money will be the new
fashion
 as every single minute is a new learning experience . Taking a single
career
 path
fashion
 is outdated. There are several reasons for the same. One major one is, Being in a competitive world  where there are numerous opportunities to pursue, opting for a single work is boring. Doing the same kind of job every single day , that too in
this
fast growing
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 world clearly shows that it is not a sustainable
career
 choice .
Moreover
, the earnings from
this
 way are not quite interesting. the growth in the economic graph will not be high . In order to survive in
this
 competitive world , one needs to opt for various careers.
Instead
 of limiting ourselves to
single
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career
 , we should explore
the
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new ways of earning. And It has become the new
fashion
 now, as people are using their experience
into
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 several fields and increasing their earrings.
This
fashion
also
 proves that . life is all about learning and applying the knowledge to grow consistently.
For example
,
a
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middle class
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 family to survive , doing a typical job 5 days a week doesn't contribute to the financial growth of the family.
Instead
, having multiple ways of earnings can be of
lot
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 of help.
Moreover
 ,
its
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it's
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 always good to have
backup
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a backup
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career
choice
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choices
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 as
the
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crisis in any sector
quite
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 common these days. In conclusion,
Its
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It's
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 always better to opt for various
career
 choices and ways of earning money which benefits us during
crisis
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a crisis
the crisis
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 .
Moreover
, life is all about learning every single day
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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