Some people say that the purpose of education is to prepare individuals to be useful to society. Others say its purpose is to prepare individuals to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As we all know, in order to build a better
society
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and to achieve our ambitions and goals ,
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is the key factor.
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is what brings
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in
people
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's thoughts and actions.
Education
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has a very important role in our lives. able to become an educated human being and to be useful for
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society
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is a very sensible action. our country needs more educated
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in all sectors
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in politics. the ability to understand
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's problems and provide a solution understanding their needs is what
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society
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is required in the present day. becoming a politician is not the only thing that we can do to build a better
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, there are plenty
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of other
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activities through which we can go into the public and offer our help. There are plenty of NGO's which are established to address various problems of our
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. Being a part of them and extending our helping hands can be a very useful act
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our
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. We can explain and educate
people
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on how to address our problems to our leaders in fact we can help our
society
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understand what factors to consider while
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a leader for our
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. And we know, what kind of a major role does
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agriculture has in our
society
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. Helping farmers to understand the latest techniques in agriculture can help them yield good results.
now a days
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,
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jobs
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gain
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major
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share in the job market. But there are other jobs as well , where we can earn and serve the
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such
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as lawyers, motivational speakers,
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etc., where we can use our
education
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to earn as well serve the
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. For an individual
self satisfaction
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is very important. 70
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of the
people
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are doing which are not related to their
education
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. to understand what we actually want and what our goal will help an individual to grow better in life.
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of taking the legacy of the family, following our dreams will bring a difference in the way we look at
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life. Choosing
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right
education
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and using it to achieve our goals can be a driving factor
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our lives I would like to conclude that we can find a way to use our
education
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to go after our goals as well as contribute a bit to a better
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. One
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solution is joining
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an NGO and offering our help in our free
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while doing a job for our earning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preparation
  • beneficial
  • society
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • civic responsibility
  • active participation
  • social initiatives
  • societal issues
  • solutions
  • specialized professions
  • personal growth
  • self-fulfillment
  • passions
  • interests
  • potential
  • talents
  • job prospects
  • financial stability
  • balance
  • meaningful
  • foundation
  • emphasis
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