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Many students find it difficult to focus or pay attention at school nowadays. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

#students #focus #attention #school
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Nowadays many
students
 are unable to focus on their studies. The two main reasons for
this
 problem are they find
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 in following the lectures and distracted
from
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 other
students
, but
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solutions
 like asking teachers to repeat important points and staying away from
distrscting
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distracting
 people will help them to regain their attention.
Firstly
,
students
 always find
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 to follow speed lectures, because
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 teachers have to cover
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 portion of
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. While
this
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children
 eventually lose their focus and they
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have
 to wait
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until
 they get notes from
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.
For example
, some schools in Canada conducts the exams
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every two months, so lecturers have to cover quarte
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, in that rush they will teach very quickly at some time
students
 find it hard to know what they are learning. Another cause is,
students
 often get distracted from other
children
 in the class,
this
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 very regularly where they lose concentration at some point.
On the other hand
, there are two solutions for
this
 problem. one after every class teacher should give a brief summary
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 the discussed topics and while listening
some
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 important topics
students
 should sit in
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 till the topic
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completes
. By
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conducting
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 a conclusion section
students
 can
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 the missed lecture again and can solve their doubts if they have any. Another solution is, by changing his or her seat place while any important lesson is going
this
 will help them not to distract
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 their fellow mates. In conclusion,
children
 can lose
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focus
at
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 classes immediately if they feel hard to understand the lecture and disturbance from other
children
, but
by
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reviewing the
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teaching
teacher
teached
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 lessons and small seat changes can possibly solve these problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distractions
  • focus
  • pay attention
  • lack of interest
  • motivation
  • fatigue
  • sleep
  • classroom environment
  • teaching methods
  • technology addiction
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • workload
  • support
  • active learning strategies
  • engaging
  • student-centered teaching
  • realistic goals
  • rewards
  • balanced lifestyle
  • screen time
  • breaks
  • physical activity
  • support and guidance
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