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Band 5.5

An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What are the problems associated with and some possible solutions?

With
globalization
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globalisation
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, rich
countries
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 have opened their doors to
professionals
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 globally to work or reside in their
countries
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.
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, many
employees
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 from developing
countries
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 are moving to these
countries
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.
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,
this
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 trend has created some issues in poorer
countries
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.
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, it is pretty significant to identify those problems and viable solutions. Migrating a higher number of
professionals
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 has caused lots of challenges to third-world
countries
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.
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 with, most of these well-qualified people have studied in state universities or colleges.
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, money spent on their education has directly come from taxpayers. So these
professionals
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 should contribute to their native
countries
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.
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, if more
employees
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 leave the country, there will be a deficiency in certain professions.
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, when many doctors, nurses are migrating, there will be a shortage of people in the medical industry, which can be hard for local authorities to deal with.
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, there can be achievable solutions for these problems. To tackle the migration of many
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, the government can take the necessary steps. As
standards
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 of living in developed
countries
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 are excellent, many qualified
employees
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 are moving. To prevent
this
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 from happening, the government can improve the standards of living in the country.
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, since
employees
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 are being paid well in wealthy nations, authorities should pay people from these occupations, motivating them to stay and work for their own
countries
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. In conclusion,
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 there is an uptrend of moving
professionals
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 from poorer
countries
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 to rich
countries
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, state authorities can take the abovementioned actions to deter
employees
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 from migrating. If they take those steps as quickly as possible, they
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 observe an evident decline in the migrating pattern at least in ten years.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear map: intro, 2–3 body paragraphs on problems, then 2 on solutions, and a short conclusion.
structure
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and link ideas with simple words to show cause and effect.
content
Give more detail and specific facts or ideas to back up your points.
language
Use small linking words (and, but, also, therefore) to show how ideas are connected.
language
Check grammar and keep verb forms and noun forms right.
structure
The essay has a clear plan and a view of problems and ways to fix them.
content
There are examples in the text, such as doctors and nurses, to show the idea.
structure
Intro and conclusion are present and show the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled labor
  • Developed nations
  • Essential services
  • Healthcare
  • Education
  • Economic impact
  • Social impact
  • Migration
  • Inequality
  • Disparity
  • Foreign aid
  • Investment
  • Community
  • Dependency
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