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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#technologies #lives #consumers
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Shopping is one of the most crucial parts of
people
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's lives. If a question about shopping transformation is addressed, it will be challenging for us to make a decision on
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 controversial issue. Some
people
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 are a firm
believer
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 in online shopping thanks to convenience. Others,
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, have always shown intense devotion to conservative shopping due to the guarantee.
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 essay agrees with the innovation of online shopping transforms
people
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 behaviour because they are several benefits
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 as saving
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 and comparing retail price. The
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 and most obvious reason for new ways for shopping is spending
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time less
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 than traditional shopping. The rationale behind
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 is the old tradition of shopping, customers have to spend most of the
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 on transportation due to the traffic congestion in the city. The new innovation called e-commerce solves
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 problem as can be seen in the growth of e-commerce companies
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 as lazada or
shopee
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shoppe
. These applications reduce
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the transportation
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 period which customers just only click and collect the
product
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 in front of their homes. Another reason why
people
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 use online shopping is the technology that can compare the item. The key information before a customer decided to purchase something
are
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 quality and price. The eCommerce platform will have
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apply
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room for purchaser's review the experience and the
product
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 quality that can help the buyer easily to make a
desicion
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decision
.
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, the
ecommerce
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eCommerce
e-commerce
 platform has many suppliers
provided
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 the same
product
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 at different prices so customers will select by using
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 technology to compare the
product
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. In conclusion,
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trend
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tend
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 to use e-commerce by sitting at home and shopping more than the old way. From my perspective, the innovation changed consumer behaviours because
people
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 spend less
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for
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shopping and customer can compare the price
in
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on
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 different platforms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transforming
  • consumers
  • buying and selling
  • new technologies
  • revolutionized
  • consumer experience
  • e-commerce
  • convenience
  • range of options
  • mobile payment systems
  • transactions
  • challenges
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