It has been more than 40 years since man first landed on the moon. Some people think that space research is a waste of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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first
steps on the moon were taken by a human being. Some people believe, that
money
invested into the research of
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space
are
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money
wasted. I agree with
this
statement only partly and in the following
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I would like to describe why. On the one hand,
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human kind
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is facing a plethora of serious problems and different kinds of challenges, which should be funded by governments and large organizations.
For instance
, the scarcity of food in non-developed countries leads to thousands of deaths daily.
Furthermore
, we are
also
facing
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environmental crisis and it should be an absolute priority to preserve
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Mother Earth for
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generations. To put it in
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, I think, that we should invest
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majority of our
money
to protect the planet we are living on.
On the other hand
, the universe has fascinated millions of people over the centuries. It is completely understandable, that humans, as
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curious living creatures want to explore everything
the
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space
has to offer, but it costs a lot of
money
and sometimes even human lives. Governments of developed countries invested enormous sums of
money
were put into building
space
ships in the past 50 years, but there were some catastrophes
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opened the eyes of
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public. In conclusion, I believe, that funding of
space
research should be limited,
howewer
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however
it should not be banned completely. In my
opinion
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a compromise should be found between funding the issues we are facing and the exploration of
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.
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