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The restoration of an old building in major cities in the world cost numerous governments' expenditures. This money should be used in new housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree?

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Dear Emma and Jason, I would like to say sorry regarding my
party
 on
last
 Thursday has been interrupted you both. I did not know that it was so much loud and caused your sleeping
time
 problems. What happened is that I had a
party
 celebration with over ten of my friends in my room. We started playing game cards and singing a song
at
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from
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 7 pm until midnight. I think the music was
quite
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quite a
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 high volume
Also
, I did not care how much noise was. Again, I do apologize that I did not inform you beforehand. I admit that
this
 situation affected your privacy and
time
.
Although
 the
party
held
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was held
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 on late
night
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at night
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, I need to let you know the exact finished
time
. In the future, I will send you
email
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 the information which relates to the
party
, including started and finished
time
, activities, and number of people. One more thing to consider is I will try to organize the
party
 on the weekend so as to everyone does not worry about the late
time
. I hope you will forgive my
mistaken
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 at
this
time
. Best regards, Jameekorn
Submitted by jameekorn.insawang on

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