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Write an essay of in 250 words to describe your favourite classmate.

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It was a hot day in August 2014, I went to Giang Vo Secondary School to meet my new teacher and classmates. It was my
first
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 day at school so I felt nervous but a little bit excited.
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 I was afraid of being lonely, I really wanted to make new friends. I walked inside the class and everybody was staring at me, which made me very shy.
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, I asked a random girl that if I could sit beside her and she said yes. So
this
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 was Mai
Hanh
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 - my
favorite
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 classmate and
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 my best friend till now.
Hanh
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 is a gorgeous girl. She is of average height and rather skinny. Her face is round with a split chin, sparkling big brown eyes, an upturned nose and thin lips. She has medium-length wavy layered hair, which made her more fashionable. She prefers wearing casual, comfortable clothes.
Hanh
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 has a great personality. She is outgoing and interesting as well. She can easily make friends with others, she has a sense of
humor
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 and
always
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 full of energy, that
why
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is why
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 everybody likes her. She is a trustworthy person that I can
rely
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. When I have problems, she is always the one to lend a sympathetic ear. She is the only one I have told most of my secrets because I know she will never tell a soul. She has
talent
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 for Arts, her paintings are beautiful and
colorful
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.
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, she has
an
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absent-minded. Sometimes, she puts her phone in the refrigerator and forgets to take it out! On the whole,
Hanh
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 is a girl who
not
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 only beautiful but
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 good-natured, cheering and talented. She is the one who made a difference in my life. I could say she is the most perfect soulmate that I’ve ever had and I hope our friendship will
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 forever.
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