Today, the high sales of popular goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real need of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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, As we live in a contemporary era, advertisement has been flooded with blending information in order to keep
people
more update . it “s gain more popularity among ordinary
people
to increase the consumerism for products.
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claim that it is nothing but a wastage of money
although
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do not
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need the products . To commence with, there are
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of ways for branding promotion in order to boost the customer
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most trending
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platforms
like tv,social media ,youtube
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platform
and so on these are the
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source of spreading ads,
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more
people
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promotions.
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the broadcast mode of branding promotion has been changed vastly than the past .apart from
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the technology is almost here and there so that
people
are more faced
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type of circumstance and they purchase goods impulsively soon after watch ads.
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order to raise the ratio of marketing it has played
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role in our life .
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it offers a wide range of
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On the one hand , it totally
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on individuals how much they consume money to buy their daily
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necessary
things . because of their preference matters a lot
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independence to opt for their things, But sometimes it diverts
people
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products but they
also
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towards
this
for the manipulation some factors like brand promoters played a serious role to broadcast their profit in business. sometimes
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celebrities
are doing ads for the sake of some handsome money . so
people
can more into the
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advertisement
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To sum up ,
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would like to say that it has some merits which are
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by the demerits .
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totally upon us which way we take
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strongly believe that we should consume our income by our own capability
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by the influence of others , nor the branding promotions …
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