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Many schools these days have problems with poor student behaviour. Why do you think these problems occur? What could be done to tackle these problems?

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No one can deny that it has been a big issue that
students
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 do not listen to their elders, which is happening because of the overuse of mass media. These days, educational institutions report at alarming rates about those
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 who have evil actions. In
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 and foremost, one of the leading causes of the
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 is that drugs have become more popular and easy to buy.
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,
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 are busier in their work-life, so they can not take care of their
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, and
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 bring drugs into classrooms and distribute them during study periods. In Pakistan,
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, more than half of the young generation spend their pocket money on medications. So, the solution is for the government to tackle
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, they should construct strict laws and make it essential for
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 to spend their quality time like three to four hours with kids, which would attract
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 to study. Another cause of the issue is excessive use of social media and technology exposure, linked to mental health and decreased cognitive functions.
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, many
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 go to
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 with their electronic devices and
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 send messages in between class time. To tackle
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,
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 administrations should ban technical devices, especially smartphones.
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,
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 should consider the screen timing and examine the content on their mobile phones to be the best student in class and life. All things considered,
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 misbehave at
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 due to their bad habits,
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 as excessive use of mass media, drugs, and being an attention-seeker.
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 is a severe concern unless
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,
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 administrations, and governments take particular measures,
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's education will suffer.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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