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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In many families, renting a
house
 is the way you can save your money and easier to move around but in my
opinion
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 I think owning a
house
 is better if you have enough money to pay each month because it is good in the long term. And for
people
 like me and my family who’s always spending
time
 in the
house
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 it gives us more privacy as well. In my opinion, my family used to rent a
house
 for a long
time
 and it's a lot more expensive than buying a
house
 because the cost of your monthly repayment decreases with interest rate cuts. You may need to pay a big amount of money at
first
 but you invest
for
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 your own
house
. So I think it is valuable.
Secondly
, it fits
people
 who love spending
time
 in the
house
 and love doing activities at home because owning a
house
 makes you feel more
like
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at
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 home. As well as
people
 who have pets, they have their own places to walk and play around to give us more privacy and warmth at the same
time
. Owning a
house
 you might have to deal with your
first
 pay but after
all
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 it's just to make your life a lot easier. Owning a
house
 is good for a couple, family, even
people
 who love spending
time
 at home. It gives you lots more privacy and
feel
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 free to do anything you like to do. I would really recommend even
this
 situation of covid easier for your life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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