In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment. To what extent do you agree?

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day and age, criminal activities performed by adolescents are rising significantly. Many claims that penalising the teenagers who are involved in massive offences, should be treated in a similar way as adults. I agree with

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forementioned statement up to a large extent.

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,other measures should be taken into account before making a judgement

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as circumstances and reason behind the crime.

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, those who believe in equal penalties as adults, think it is important because it will develop a sense of fear in teenagers which will make them think twice before committing a misdeed.

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, life long imprisonment for an adolescent will be more deteriorating than juvenile prison for a few months or years.

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, young people will not indulge in big crimes at least and ,

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the rate of violence will dropdown.

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, if youth criminals will get adult's correction

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another peer group will be more cautious regarding breaking the laws. Because one

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incident of their lives can destroy their future and opportunities ahead.

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,knowing about life sentences and death penalties will make a difference for youngsters because at present many adolescents think that they can get away even by doing serious damage to the community.

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, Before coming to a decision, other external factors should be assessed

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, sometimes self-protection can lead to harm to the other person which is completely unintentional.

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, unknowingly done violation of regulations can be detrimental.

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, in these ,cases one should look at the real scenario and surroundings which made a child do what is unethical. In these situations, mental health and educational counselling should be considered along with punishments as per crime. To conclude

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, an increasing number of crimes can be controlled by punishing all criminals in some way with no discrimination based on age.

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, surroundings and reasons behind performing the offensive acts should be taken into account to offer counsellings and support groups for children.

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Topic Vocabulary:

juvenile delinquency
criminal behavior
rehabilitation
recidivism
adolescent development
retribution
impulse control
the justice system
societal influences
environmental factors
juvenile justice
punitive measures
adult incarceration
youth crime
reformative programs
deterrence
mitigating circumstances
restorative justice
correctional facilities
peer pressure

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In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment. To what extent do you agree?

Fully explain your ideas

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Some people believe that both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem, while others argue against this. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In some countries, the number of shootings increase becausee many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people choose to be self- employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might be the case ? What could be the disadvantage?

you have arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain the important event • apologise for the situation • suggest a new arrangement

some people think that arts subjects such as Drama and Music are an important part of a school education. Others, however, think that they are a waste of time and resources. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.