Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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the point that commercials and advertisements attract us to buy products though we really do not need
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at that particular time. Marketing may benefit companies to increase sales, but for a common
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it is a trap. We can see different posters displaying discounts on various products. Discount is one word that draws most
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families to buy items. People tend to buy the items at a reduced price without knowing
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quality
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to the above point , there is one more factor that affects the public .
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of these commercials, we can see a number of announcements on a particular product from different brands.
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confuses people to decide which one to buy.   We can see big celebrities promoting products and even endorsing them. But
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is our responsibility to assess the quality of the commodity before getting it.  Nowadays , there is no limit to where the campaigns can happen. We are seeing flyers on the roads displaying the Item, Ads
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the TV, even
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social media .
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, there are separate channels for the commercials.
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shows that they have become part and parcel of our lives.
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is not confined to commodities alone but has its mark in food items as well. In conclusion, advertisements are beneficial to companies to gain profits but can have
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impact on the public.
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shows that people's responsibility has increased while getting an item.
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includes assessing the quality and necessity of the item
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of buying a discounted priced product.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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