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some people say that E-books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree

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Modern
technology
 and Electronic books, some people think that will replace the old-fashioned
of
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reading styles. In
this
 essay agree that new
technology
 of reading maybe replaces newspaper and magazines.
Firstly
, I will give some advantages and one disadvantage in my opinion of modern
technology
 and E-books. In the
modern day
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, people can't deny new
technology
such
 as mobile phones, tablets and
computer
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computers
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 or even the internet. One of the benefits is easier to read than paper.
This
 is due to the fact that reading on a glass screen is better.
For instance
, you can zoom in and zoom out and you can access information that you want to know about, Another example is easy to keep in your backpack, especially in your pocket.
As a result
, your favourite books or magazines is will be convenient to read than
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 past.
Secondly
, social media is always faster than newspapers.
This
 is due to the fact that the internet connecting to around the world, so you can receive new information easily.
For example
, while my dad and my mom waiting for a newspaper that will be sent to him in
next
 morning, I already knew that news was on Twitter or Facebook. For
this
 reason, we can access
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information faster than in the past and we don't have to pay for that.
Although
 there are many advantages of new reading habits, there is
also
 a disadvantage to taking them into consideration. One of my disadvantages is the focus on the screen for a long time
this
 will increase the possibility of eyes pain. On-screen whether tablet or computer both have blue light, blue light the light that will affect your eyes if you concentrate to display for a long time. Because of
this
 only drawback that I can observe and
this
 is a very huge problem may lead to
lose
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 your sight. In conclusion, In the future new reading habit as E-book will be replaced by newspaper and magazines, as you can see nowadays, most of printing house and printing
factory
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 were closed. People turned to get news from the internet.
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