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Fewer students are studying science at school and university, favouring more computer based subjects instead. Is this a positive or negative development? What are the reasons for this?

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In the modern world,
students
 can choose what they want to learn in colleges or universities.
Nevertheless
, the number of
science
 studying
students
 is on the decline with the introduction of computer-related subjects.
Although
 it is a prima facie attractive trend, it has more negative impacts on society. As a nation, innovation is a must to move forward. When more
students
 learn
science
, there will be more scientists and their innovations which will help to produce new machines and equipment.
As a result
, the production rate will skyrocket within the country and eventually contribute to the economy. If
students
 do not study
science
, there will be a deficiency in the scientific
job
 market which cannot be replaced with the people who have mastered computer
science
.
Furthermore
, as there is a growing trend of children’s
favor
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 of computer-related courses, a large number of people will move to the
job
 market and eventually there will be a plethora of employees
such
 as software engineers, system administrators.
However
, since the computer-related
job
 market is still growing, many computer graduates will be unemployed or underpaid.
For example
, in Sri Lanka, the average salary of a junior system developer is way below a fresh
science
 graduate’s salary.
Therefore
 from the
job
 perspective, more
students
 should select
science
 subjects in order to protect their future. In conclusion, even though there is a positive trend of
students
’ movement towards computer-related subjects, they should think to learn
science
 since it is more advantageous to the country as well as themselves. Parents and teachers should take responsibility for selecting the correct path
that is
science
.
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