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In some countries around the world men and women tend to have their children later in life. Why is this happening? What are the effects on society and family life?

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The perfect time and age for having
children
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 is much public debate recently among people worldwide. Individuals in different nations decide to delay the state of having
children
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 in their life.
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 their choice, along with the possible
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 on the community and family life. There are many reasons which push
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people
 to think about when it is better to have babies. One of
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 is that a significant number of parents are afraid of
children
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 responsibilities and taking care of them.
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, these
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responsibilities
 will prevent them
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from
 resuming their
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 if they are students or it could be considered as a drawback of getting their dream job. For
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 reason, a lot of
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people
 decide to have
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 after achieving their goals
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.
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, a growing body of research found that doctors are struggling to find time for their families and
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, as they should work for a long
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period
 at the hospital. Another reason is that they take
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 consideration the notion of being qualified for raising human beings or not.
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 means that they want to provide their
children
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 with the best quality of life. To illustrate
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 idea, some developing families sacrifice
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 gift because of their income status. The delay of having
children
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 has various important
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 on the world. One essential effect is that
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this
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 phenomenon could be a solution to the
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pobulation
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population
.
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,
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a lot
 of environmental
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problems
 will be improved
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 as the increase in natural resources consumption.
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, there will be some negative
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 on family members like the existence of gape generation between
children
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 and their parents due to the huge difference in age. In conclusion, individuals' achievement could be difficult if it occurs at the same time
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 having
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 and people are always afraid of family duties. The world could get benefit from the notion of dealy of creat family in enhance the environmental issues, while it could have negative
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 on
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 situation.
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