Some people believe positive thinking has benefits,while others consider, it has drawbacks. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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that positive thinking has a great influence on our mind and body, while others argue, that being always happy comes with significant drawbacks. In my opinion, the pros of being an optimistic person definitely outweigh the cons of
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issue. On the one hand, the law of attraction has gained increased popularity recently.
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mindset attracts positive experiences into your life. It has been proven by
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in the United States, that those, who are optimists have better jobs and happier families.
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, another survey has shown that
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have a great impact on individuals who fight
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serious diseases,
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cancer.
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, not everything is filled with sunshine every day and while
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mood is vital, working with negative emotions is
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important. Pushing negative emotions aside might lead to serious mental problems and it can even stop
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development we have been working on for years.
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, when someone is going through a difficult breakup, it is easier to live through all the negative emotions
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, it is better to cry and be sad for few days, than shut down all the feelings and pretend, that everything is fine. In conclusion, while working with toxic thoughts is very important, it is better to be excited about everything life has prepared for us.
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