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Some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are advantages and disadvantages of a family run business.

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People reckon that, if you want success in the
business
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 world, you should
work
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 with your family but there are some benefits and drawbacks of the family-run
business
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. In
this
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 essay, we discuss both pros and cons.
Firstly
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, one of the biggest advantages of a family's
business
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 is their loyalty and integrity. They are
a
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family
members
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 so they are honest and loyal with their
work
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.
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,
generally
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 people are not loyal to the
company
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 if a
company
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 is
in
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at
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loss they resign and join another
company
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 but family
members
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 stay together in all ups and downs.
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, they devote all their strength and time to thrive their
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.
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, employees
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 according to the time duration,
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however
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members
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 of the family
work
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 harder without a time limit.
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, one of the drawbacks is, youth want to prove themselves and they have no interest in their family's
business
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 so it becomes a burden for them.
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, in
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 modern era, youth want something new in their life. They have their own vision for the life and parents pressure them to join their
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 so they become frustrating about
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 control freak attitude and sometimes it
cause
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 their
business
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 and relationships.
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, some
members
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 of the family are greedy and they want whole control in the
business
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 and that makes things complicated in the relationship and
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business
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 suffer most in those situations because no one takes
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 from anyone . In conclusion, there are some drawbacks,
however
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, I still believe working in the family
business
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 is more beneficial for a
company
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 or for your family
also
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • loyalty
  • trust
  • communication
  • generational knowledge
  • long-term outlook
  • family traditions
  • stability
  • cost-effective
  • flexible payment arrangements
  • conflict
  • tensions
  • roles
  • diversity
  • external perspectives
  • innovation
  • adaptation
  • succession planning
  • instability
  • leadership
  • ownership
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