Some people believe that teenagers should study all school subjects while others claim that they should focus on the subjects they are best at or that they are interested in. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is an ongoing debate about the curriculum for youngsters and teenagers in schools to study. Some argue that students should continue only studying their
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subject
, while others counter it with a statement, they should study all the
subjects
. There are a number
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why people follow
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notion with heavy reasoning by their sides.
Firstly
, if a
student
puts more
efforts
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only
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the
subjects
he
/
she likes, by doing so, the
student
gets more time to concentrate and
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temperament to learn things quickly.
In addition
to
this
, an individual must do what he loves,
this
brings a lot more
effeciency
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efficiency
and productivity while studying, which in turn yields
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positive results like good grades and academic excellence. The
student
can be considered clear and focused
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achieving goals in his
/
her life.
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this
achievement can come with a cost. The
student
will miss out
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other opportunities which he
/
she could never have discovered, the life of a
student
will become quite monotonous and witness
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comparatively
less development, socially as well as academically.
Secondly
, people support the idea of
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the curriculum
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which ensures a
student
to undertake all the
subject
, believe that if a
student
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to learn most of the things and not stick to one
subject
at
such
a developing age like adolescence.
For instance
, Plato, his area of expertise was not only limited to philosophy
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but
also
in mathematics, politics, science and biology witnessed a colossal amount of contributions. To make a point,
such
ideas
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to be cultivated in the growing years of the
student
. These ideas are
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of ambivalent students with broad horizons. For overall development at
such
budding age, students need to cultivate
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all other sorts of knowledge that they gain from other
subjects
.
Nevertheless
, the
student
could end up being "jack of all, and master of none" if he
/
she fails to choose
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one
subject
and
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is unable
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to do it attentively. In conclusion, I believe that schools must ensure the
student
studies all the
subject
, to make sure the
student
develops as a person holistically. I think
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the disadvantages of studying all the
subjects
outweighs
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the one in which a
student
wishes to study only his choice of
subjects
.
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