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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss Both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, Advertisement plays an important role in marketing ways. Some
people
 perceive that advertising is successful in influencing
people
 for commercial purposes.
On the contrary
, others believe that advertising cannot encourage them to buy advertising
products
.
This
 essay elaborates the rationales behind these two opposing aspects in greater depth and expresses my personal stance on the aforementioned issue. On the one hand, the Advertising industry is growing significantly at the present. Ample evidence for
this
 is that advertisements are surrounding our daily life which is on televisions, signs beside roads, and social networks. It is because of a variety of reasons. Some
people
 trust the
ads
 because they perceive that reviews of
products
 in
ads
 are true.
In addition
, many companies try to use advertisements and promotions for increasing their sales.
Therefore
, the influence of advertising can affect decision’s
people
 about buying
products
.
On the other hand
, Advertising cannot persuade many
people
 to buy something.
This
 is due to a wide range of reasons. Some think that advertisements deceive them by exaggerated properties of
products
.
For instance
, the advertising of cosmetic
products
 claims that
this
 product can make your skin bright and white in three days.
Conversely
, in
fact
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that is
 impossible to change your skin colour in three days.
Furthermore
, advertising makes
people
 feel annoying them because it interrupts their enjoyment.
For example
, when
people
 enjoy their online videos the
ads
 notices on their screen and disturb them. To summarize, in spite of unaccepting
people
, the number of advertising increases swiftly.
Therefore
,
people
 should be aware of the power of
ads
 and outweigh your decision rather than the persuading advertisement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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