Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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of people agree they should help society in
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debate to focus on studies. I
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agree teenagers suppose to help
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, our education system and micro families not giving a chance to
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generation
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environment. It is
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teaching for
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community and how outside kids
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in local senior citizen care
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will help them to know the old generation bonding. It will
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help them in future why it will mandatory to take care
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their
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governments
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budgets towards the
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expenditure
towards
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nation with more values.
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