Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these to aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People have different views about how a country can be economically and environmentally
flourish
. Wrong verb form
flourishing
While
some believe that it would be impossible for the countries to be successful in terms of financial and environmental due to
the inconsistency between these terms, I would argue with those who claim otherwise
.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why those proponents point out that it is feasible for a country to be a prospect in both environmental and financial topics. One reason is that, although
these days most of
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apply
the
countries have Correct article usage
apply
been
undergone a lot of pressureUnnecessary verb
apply
,
if their governments enacted some green rules, all businesses would follow them, resulting in they will have a green supply chain. Remove the comma
apply
This
green supply chain not only leads to companies produce
green products but Wrong verb form
producing
also
help
them to decrease their environmental Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
pollutions
. The more green rules, the more flourishing Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
country
.
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the country
By contrast
, it seems to me that in our competitive world companies are inevitable
competing with others in producing goods. Change the word
inevitably
This
may lead to a significant increase in the total rate of production, resulting in an increased production of greenhouse gases. Examples of this
approach can be seen in China, which has the highest rate of production in both financial profits and greenhouse gases. In addition
, having a clean environment needs a great deal of attention from governments, which cause
Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
compel
businesses to supply more green infrastructures. These infrastructures are costlier for them, resulting in they should probably increase the final prices of goods. Verb problem
apply
As a result
, people will less tend to buy, and therefore
, they will have less profit.
In conclusion, although
attention to the
environmental issues is important, countries can not focus on both Correct article usage
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economical
and environmental aspects because inconsistency would exist between them.Replace the word
economic
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