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People should follow the customs and tradition when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Culture
 is a significant term for establishing
society
. Different part of the world has built their own customs
tradition
 in order to be distinguished and unique from others. In the case that we would become a new member of each particular
society
, we should adapt ourselves along with their
culture
. Meanwhile, we are able to preserve and illustrate our authentic
tradition
. The main reason why we must get along with the
culture
 of a new country is human needs social activities,
therefore
 we want to be acceptable in order to have a great relationship with the
society
. To complete the acceptance, we should learn and follow the rule or the social value of
society
.
However
, as we are the foreigner of the new
society
, it would be impossible to become a native member of the country. I would like to suggest that we can
also
 conserve and distribute our original
culture
, while we are adapting to the new
culture
. To support
this
 statement, I would like to illustrate
this
 sample case. In Thailand, we have many immigration societies which both conserve their unique
tradition
 and practice themselves to get along with
Thai
 traditions.
For example
,
Japanese
 immigrants in Bangkok have established their own neighbourhoods, restaurants and department stores which there are really popular among
Thai
 citizens.
Moreover
, the
Japanese
 neighbourhoods have become a representative of
Japanese
tradition
 and have contributed to a massive number of
Thai
 tourists travel to Japan every year.
On the other hand
, while
Japanese
 immigrants are living in Bangkok, they usually get along with
Thai
 norms,
such
 as greeting, which almost all
Japanese
 people in Thailand are accepted by
Thai
 citizens and we have a kind relationship with each other. In conclusion, I totally agree that we must follow the rules and norms of the new country that we are likely moving to.
In addition
, we can
also
 represent our original
tradition
 to the new
society
 as well.
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