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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. DO the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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According to the statistics, reading E-
books
 have been gaining more popularity in the past few years.
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 has several pros and cons which will be discussed in
this
 essay. Generally, it is not just the
books
 which has been changed via electronic devices: there have been many transformations after launching
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smartphones
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smart phones
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 all over the world.
This
 may be beneficial in many aspects.
Firstly
, the amount of wood production and
as a result
 timber cutting will be decreased drastically if people use electronic
books
 more than they used to.
In addition
, they will be able to carry hundreds of
books
 at the same time without the smallest extra weight on their shoulders. So,
this
 kind of reading might be much more accessible where ever you are.
On the other hand
, the risk of weakening our
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 will increase tremendously by watching the screen for a long time.
For example
, literate people have to read and study too much that they need glasses sooner than the rest. In fact, reading and studying
books
 on the screens of mobile phones or laptops deteriorate the situation even more.
In addition
, tablets and electronic
book
 devices need to be
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 regularly, and
that is
 the issue some people could not be
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 with easily.
Finally
, to read E-
books
, you are required to use your phone which has many other applications that would be
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irresistible
 to waste your time on them. Sometimes, I find it very hard to concentrate on the
book
 when I receive many notifications on my mobile. In conclusion,
although
 reading E-
books
 in comparison to the hard copies, have many superiorities, I, myself would prefer the old-fashioned way which is leafing through the pages of a
book
. I am absolutely in love with picking the
book
 from the bookshelves , smelling it, skimming through it, and
then
 snuggling up the couch and start reading it.
That is
 the pleasure I would not give up
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